Yellow - by Invictus
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Energize thee :)
Darkness falls
Mist in the air
Somber
Placid pond
Enchanted azure
Numbness of mind
Dribbling pen
Quivering heart
Watery eyes
Though your gone
Remain heart and mind
Stillness
Repose
Sniffle of nose
Forever had an ending
Unlike your beautiful song
But hey,
My truth aligned
Your held near
Love
Light
Truth alas
Wherever you shall pass
Ancient glow beseeking your path
Eternal flair
Shines forever
Even should you not return
I dance around you
In a majestic way
Poke yer rear
When sadness plays
Like a fiddler
Seeking acceptance
Blinded by his own truth
It belongs to you
Yours to own
So why do you groan
You're not alone
I'm ALWAYS here
For you
So
Shine on as you do
Paint us your passion
Use the palette of you
Inspire us
Enliven us
Be true to you
I'll shower you with love until I'm blue
Then paint you yellow and that's the truth.
xx
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Love it!
glad to have a fan like yours.
and I can say without lying or flattering...
You're the only one.
Awww so sweet...:O) Hugs
dohn121~ Thanks :) happy to here it had a voice!
bluemeanie~ happy you love it!
zampano~ glad to be a fan. the forum poem was a lot of fun! maybe publish a hub, you will surely have more fans then. :)
G-Ma ~so nice to see you again. Thanks for the sweetness! :)
Wow, truly inspriring, such an impact with short sentences that flow with the read, enhancing the quality of content -
Title is on target - & you place imagery to pull the piece together and show the reader in numerous ways - that hope lives, beyond the sadness - there is a positive for every negative in life - Great job!! Love it.
Denizee ~ Thank you for such a lovely comment! I agree, hope prevails and we can hold beauty for special people alive in many ways. :)
Beautiful, beautiful!
The rhythm reminds me of the soft gurgling sound of a brook "as it trips and it falls over stones on its way."
Amazing...i..loved...the..last..lines...Great..poetry...
Please...keep..writing...and...publishing..
It...feels...great..for..the..soul
Uriel
I like the eternal flair shines forever...what a great line.
beautiful words, very touching. Keep up great work.
Pleasure to connect with you.
Warm Wishes & Hugs
jill of alltrades ~ Thanks for the lovely words!
Uriel ~ Thank you! Glad you like it... You have inspired me to write even when I am not feeling all fuzzy good! :D I appreciate it!
Dream on ~ Thank you! :) All the lines just puddled out at random and with this poem I did not adjust or edit anything. Just let it be itself!
Raging Bull ~ Thanks so much for your lovely words and warm wishes. i am happy we connected as well. Hugs back!
This one's a beauty!More please.
Lots of emotion caught in this one especially hurt and strength. Well written.
If you insist, 4 ever MO! ;) Thanks much!
Russ~ I greatly appreciate your words! Thank you!
was listening to yellow as you typed, take them if ya want them
Thanks, Brenda, back at cha! xx
Yellow, the sweetest song for such thoughtful and inspiring words. your work is always tight and clean to read. I enjoy very much.
AIDY ~ Thank you so much. Your words always mean so much! :)
I like this one word, sudden caesura style... very surreal.
Shamel~ :) Thanks much!
Very nice!! Great work!!
Very nice!! Great work!!
poketo secret ~ Hi, thank so much! :) PEACE
Encouraging and beautiful, thank you.
Hey lxxy, so nice to see you again. Thank you for the lovely words! :)
Wow. That was really good and fun to read. Thanks for making this hub.
marshall92 ~ Thank you, I am happy you liked it. It felt good to make it! :)
ARE YOU LOST INVICTUS........ HERE I AM AGAIN LISTENING TO YELLOW AND FEELING BLUE
compu-smart ~ Thanks much! ;) I'll be sure to check you out!
Hey Brenda! hmmmm.. lost, nahhh. :) Just look a bit of a holiday refresher! lol
did you go to the woods by any chance..... so you are alive and kicking.... hello
lol... ahhhh, peace and tranquility bestow me. :) hello, I have missed you!
Very cool composition. I love the feel of scrolling down the short lines.
Thanks so much, Benjimester! :)
Ahhhhh....you are so yellow, too!
Love that song, love your poetry, love the way you composed this hub. I think I just became a fan.
Paradise7 ~ Awwww..you just placed a huge smile in my heart! Thank you for such a lovely response! :)
sadness and hope.. written in lines, and with words..
bingskee ~ Thank you for your thoughts, much appreciated!
Lovely! Well written definitely.. keep up the good work.. ;)
Hi hpwriter! Thanks so much! Great to see you! :)
It took my mind out of the now for a while,which is a good thing!
Thanks I*n*v*i*c*t*u*s!: )
Warren E ~ I so appreciate your comment. It gives life and inspiration to writing, Thank you! :)
wow succinct words and phrases but they pack a punch in bright yellow! :D
Cris ~ Your comment means so much...Thanks you! :D
I really enjoyed your poem. I like the style; it moves smoothly and clearly.
Thanks
Tony
Tony ~ Thank you so much, appreciated! :)
This is beautiful dear one. But what, am I now Chinese? lol Like a fiddler huh? Well then I must play you a tune. Man you have been busy now haven't you. I can't keep up with everyone, let me know when you do a hub poem, whatever. Keep up the fine skills of alphabet knitting. peace CC
You a fiddler...hmmmm...:) What tune would you play me, eh??? Would so love to know!!! Thanks fo the high praise... whew.. :D
Why whiskey in a jar. LOL
I definitely like your style
CC ~ You so crack me up... LOL :D Better than 'Time in a bottle' or 'Nights in White Satin'... rofl... :D
cindyvine ~ Thanks so much... That means a lot to hear from you!! :D
This one is funny at the end. I like the format you used.
The style.
cindyleedavis ~ Thank you! :) Ya, it would bee sweet to paint someone Yellow, eh?? :D
One of my fav songs that, as for the Poem, what can I say, I loved it. Take care my friend !
Thanks, Art! I am glad you love it! I feel these words speak for many! :)
this is just absolutely brilliant.... if you listen to the song while you read the poem, it is just ace.... wow you are certainly a good writer, any poems in the pipeline????
wow.. a yellow enchantment for me!.. there's something that make my eyes stay in your words.. thank you Sir! :)...very great!
Miss Take ~ Thanks so much. Very happy to hear...Not sure what's in the pipeline at the moment!! ;)
pinkhawk ~ I so appreciate your lovely comment! Now I'm all warm and fuzzy..he he ;) thanks for stopping by...
lovely verse and song, i like the colour purple though
Thanks much :) I like purple too. Yet my fave coulours are green and blue!
What an amazing read . . I cant wait to read some more of your Hubs .. interesting as I read your last comment to poetlorraine, all I could think about is that when you mix your favorite blue with the color of this extraordinary hub of yellow .. you get green:)
I so thank you, wavegirl22! you are so right.. green is my FAVE COLOUR!!!" :d
One of my all time favorite colors, used to love to sit in a sunbeam and study the millions of dust motes sailing in its yellow rays, and there's nothing more lovely that a young girl in a yellow sun dress in the jazzy greens of July. Superb work~~MFB III
MFB lll ~ reading your comments just to makes my day! :) Thank you so very much....for sharing such lovey visions with me. :)
200 fans wow
you are such a lovely friend and inspiration! Thank you, from the depths of my heart! :)
Hi ****IN**** It's a great love poem, a testiment and an unlifting declaration, I really enjoyed it, and the Coldplay song with it! Hub-Treats to you and Happy Halloween, as I have punched the up button to rate your great HUB!
Hi Deborah, Thank you so much! :) So happy you enjoyed. Thanks as well for the treats! :)
I love Yellow, the color and your poem. Especially love the last two lines of the poem. Nice touch. If I may ask what made you choose yellow?
Hi Moyra ~ Thanks for the lovely words.. I chose yellow do to the song. The song was the theme of the poem and what I was looking to draw upon! :)
i know sorry could not resist that one, which song was it i did not notice was it umbrella.....
getting lots of fans aren't you......
I'd say you are getting lots of fans... you'll probably be at 400 by the time you hit 6weeks... :)
can you handle that many different people, really... could you be 400
hmmmm...we shall see... :) There must be a place for all of me! lol
well seems to be, how many are you at the moment if you don't mind me asking
hmmm.. I'll need to get back with the figure... :)
Done..will try to get to the forum poem later... very busy now! :)
cold play now yes this is more my thing. oh i am liking the song, and reading the poem at the same time. Am i getting it right.... it's hard being a newbie.
=D Thank you so much...you are doing fabulously for a beginner.. Of course, you did find me, eh?? ;)
Just kidding.... see you round.
just to let you know ,,,,, when she signed in, the girl above, there you were as the featured poet, so she just went into the first thing she saw...... she told me earlier, we were chatting she really is terribly new to this, and does kind a silly things all the time.....
Ahhhh, the silly things we get our selves into, eh? ;)
no the butterfly does
Does seasoning like steak, by chance?? =D
i have not got a clue better ask the butterfly, she seems to have flown away for now....... were you talking to me by the way or the butterfly
I think I swallowed the buterfly...Have you ever felt like that before??? Ahhhhhhhhhh... =D
did you scare her off do you think
Moi? scare someone.... MWUAH ha ha ha!! lol =D
Maybe it's the moondance? ;)
excuse me, sorry could not help but listen in to your conversation. How do i get pictures up on here please, i do keep making silly mistakes, but this is day one
I apologize, seasoning!
For pictures you can copy and paste, like you uploaded your avatar! ;)
Hope that helps...
do you know how to do it on here though pliz
you are kidding,eh?
I did know it was you! ha =D
"When sadness plays
Like a fiddler
Seeking acceptance
Blinded by his own truth
It belongs to you
Yours to own"- beautiful
RKHenry ~ Woah, I am sooo honoured that you have blessed my page!!! :) Thank you...
Bravo! I'm really enjoying your writing Invictus.
brandonfan ~ Thank you, glad to here! :)
hello stranger
Hey, good. how are you?
guess what, I had 5 more amazon sales, yippee! :)
wow am so happy for you..... what did you sell.... i am fine
shhhhh... it's a secret! ;)
glad to see you. how do you like the new poet, XxyourstrulyxX?
xxxwonderfulxxx do you like also, it's not me or you
I like, yes! :) seems ralwus, was sounding the alarm for us to connect. Great find, it you ask me! :)
poor ralwus....... maybe you and i will connect one day
are you around
Right here >X< ;)
aw i see you,,,,,,, how is life
Haha, life is good, and you?
I like this one invictus, you ARE a wordsmith!
Thank you, brandonfan, you are too kind, and I like it! :)
just needed to listen to this song, ah that's better
thanks for stopping.. seems to be visited regularly here. even if comments are not left.
why not who would not visit, got to go to work any time now..... have to get a taxi left it too late to walk help
have fun! see ya later!
this song came on the radio whilst i was serving the lunches at work, i was sat with a lady who cannot feed herself so i was feeding her, and telling her about this song, and when i first hear it. I doubt she knew what the internet was and of course had never heard of invictus, but she said i looked happy...... that is what music and friends do, make you happy, so one more visit seemed inevitable
aw, you are so sweet ! Thanks for sharing the story... sorry I missed this earlier.. :)
Love this part:
"Shine on as you do
Paint us your passion
Use the palette of you
Inspire us
Enliven us
Be true to you..." Wow! So great...You are a great "Poet" and the music that you added to this is an excellent addition to your work. Thank you for taking me on a great Poem journey, my friend. Geez...though I had to travel a mile down here through all your previous comments...just to make a comment...LOL :)! Truly...You are a well-loved Poet here on Hub World!
Hi, "Manly"! Oh, I'm not worthy! LOL ~ JK..I am happy you liked this one..not as surpy as some others, eh! :) Yeah, this one is the most popular, yet interestingly, one I just publised a few weeks ago is just a hair shy of numbers.. yet published 3 months later..hmmmm..funny that..
Thank you, I greatly appreciate your comment! I was just having a go with you on your poem..great to have friends like you here... :)
"Nyuk, Nyuk, Nyuk...!" I Truly Loved the Just Kiddin' Comment on my Poem...My Friend. It keeps things fun on here. I agree, I*n*v*i*c*t*u*s:...it is great to have friends like you on Hub World!
Haha.. Curly, was my favourtie of the Stooges.. I am so happy you love kiddin around.. I enjoy having playful banter. Thanks for the chat! :) I'll be getting back to my puddle now! lol Cheers, "Manly Poet" friend!
do you feel footsteps, on here often?
On this poem, do you mean?? hmm, maybe. :)
mmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm on the poem..... you know people waiking around reading but not commenting....... of course.
hahahahhaa.. :D hmmm, yes I know some of THOSE people ;)
hi got a little slot here in the grand U.SA. doing a craft workshop for five year olds on friday..... we went to a field trip.... not a trip at all, but you know the expressions of the Americans..... I looked after a little girl who was screaming for about 2 hours as she did not like the loud music and all the crowds. After talking to the teacher i told her i teach crafts to kids, but i could not do it here. She was enthusiastic about me going in and said she would buy anything i needed. It has made my holiday....... if indeed it is a holiday at this stage more a nightmare... want to know what i am going to do with the little darlings..... on the craft front, i mean...
Hey, you should be back home by now.. sorry I missed a response.. Please tell me how it all went! :)
Wow, I really like your work. Glad I found your page.
kaja, thank you, I'm happy you like my stuff and found my page! :)
oh it got cancelled, i met the teacher at Cian's sports day, and i told her about my crafts, she does similar things. She was soo excited and asked me to go in, but i knew it was impossible because you have to be checked out by police etc, to work with kids. She insisted it was o.k. then sent an e.mail saying she thought she'd better ask with the powers that be, and they agreed with me. I was going to get the kids to stand in bright coloured paint, walk on paper, cut the colourful shapes out .... we were going to print out a photo of the kids, then make the foot and photo into a fridge magnet. She used the idea, and i got to swim, so we were all happy in the end.
Well, It sounds as though it all worked out for the best! sweet :)
just re read my poem about Emily's yellow world. Was with Emily yesterday. My son here in England has a son nearly as talll as him, i culd not believe it when i met them all in a cafe, just how big the children are getting. Aw, bless.......have you seen cold play in concert?
Aww, thanks for sharing that. :) No, I have not seen Cold Plat in concert. Hmm, maybe a good one to see.
reading poem and comments, and having a chuckle, this song is still ace, i love it. I am busy building myself a little business, not been writing much, but ah well so what???? how are things with you.
dohn121 Level 2 Commenter 2 years ago
Great work, invictus. You definitely hit this one out of the ballpark!