Could we just...
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be...
Wrapped in this moment
a dollop of time
Tracing, embracing
our hearts unwind
Holding, unfolding
our racing chests
Limber, nestled, warmth
enchanted noodles
Delicately woven
starry eyes play
A coming up for air
momentarily
Until again
we drift away
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Ah, you mean not I'm the first?? Here, I thought I was being 'original' :P ...Thank you, Jess!
beautiful poem..beautiful moment, Invictus :p
Thank you, blaise! maybe it should be called
'life in a puddle' Haha... :)
Enchanted noodles ?? Bit starchy, but interesting...snuggles are good, or, as my wife calls it, spooning...Thanks for this visually poetic treat...Larry
Larry, thank you for commenting on those words.. I've been waiting for a reaction... can't really explain it..may look to a different one but, the only other that comes to mind now is 'buttery noodles enchanted'...Hehehe... :) you know that feeling when you spoonin or cuddling. Oh well, thank you for reading... appreciated that it was a treat for you!
Tasty and hypnotic. :)
Say where are those noodles?
Well, rumor has they are swimmin in my mind! LOL Though, I believe they are omnipresent at this time...Haha :D
Thank you, Raven!
the title summed up the feeling, like it...... a lot
So nice to here, seasoning! Great to see you. Thank you :)
lovely cosy little hub.......
It's been a cozy feeling kinda weekend. Thank you, Poet! :D
ooooh tell me more
Beautiful, my friend. Such a lovely thought, nestling in your lover's arms.
Hi my friend, its always nice to read your beautiful poems. Love it. Bless you.:)
Paradise, Thanks so much, my friend. Yes, I agree! :)
Kiera, glad you love it! It's always a pleasure to see you, my friend! :)
I had commented earlier, don't know what happended to it.. Sticky board today, maybe.. hehe
holding unfolding sounds kinda dreamy, lovely poem more more more
Thanks, I was feeling a bit dreamy writing this...my mind was like a wet noodle, hence the line. hehehehe
Well noodles are always nice
:) funny, I guess that was the best way to describe the dreamy laxidaisy (if thats a word) or intimate mood.. haha
Pretty good.
Thanks...I know, I should probably be doing other things when I am feeling like this poem... LOL :) Thanks for stopping, Writer!
btw ~ cool avatar!
No, the feeling must be captured when you get it. Thanks about the avatar (not too much, not to little hehe).
Thanks Writer! :) I am a bit shy about some things..haha
yeah, the avatar is festive and en vogue! hehe
we could just....... lovely poem to start the morning off with
Ah, thanks seasoning! glad to here! :)
Ahhh this one made me all smiley.
Ah, thank you, Randy! Great to see you! :)
Nice!
I love it! Perfectly describes how I feel.:)
oh, if only it could last....
Micky Dee ~ Thank you.. nice of you to drop by! :)
Zac828 ~ wow, That's cool..Thanks for stopping! :D
Justine ~ Tisk, tisk....let's stay with the moment! LOL ;)
There is the wordus in pa-us-e, it is perfect for two, let the world broil on by and just get lost in two sets of eyes studying only love...excellent~~MFB III
My goodness, your comments are so rich in meaning.. Thank you so much, MFB III. I love how you pointed our the 'us' in pa-us-e! Brilliant! Definitly captured the depth of my expression! Thanks again. :D
and mine too
your poem expression??
I*n*v*i*c*t*u*s .. you already know how much I love your work .. I save coming to visit you so that when I do I have the time to read it and read it again. . and then I usually favorite place your pieces. . it is like I hold coming here for that special alone time .. you just take me to that place with your words. .and as I sit here I know why I savor them so much. .
thanks for sharing!
OMG.. I just went back up for another read and to listen to snow patrol . .cause I saw . . chassing cars.. and then OMG I saw that you took it from my recommendation from the forum a few weeks ago . .I am just without words. . you have just made my day .. my week .. and then some!!!
wavegirl ~ You shower me with such kindness and lovely words...Thank you! I so appreciate that my work touches you. It really makes writing that much more special to hear that someone connects with what is created..
I am super smiling and blushing a bit, too! :) Thank you so much for recommending this song.. I love it and definitly felt a poem could be put with it!!
Believe me, you have made my day, too! Thank you very much. I am very grateful, my frind. :D
Noodlely nice! MMMMM! I can taste them now!
I love it! You have a gift my friend. Much enjoyed.
Sablirab ~ Thanks you! =) I am happy to see you connected to ths well! hehe..
Ladybird ~ I am so happy to see you here!! :) Thank you ever so much! It's great to have those, like you, in what sounds solid relationships have an appreciation for my work.. keeps me hopeful!
Happy Holidays to you all!!! =D
That was very nice. I enjoyed it completely. Thank you for sharing your thoughts. I'm glad to follow your work. :)
Thank you, Cagsil! I am glad you liked this and my work! I'll be around to read more of you too. I just tend to get wrapped up in the poet's .. we feed off each other.. yet, I have seen some of yours that I'd like to read more! Thanks for stopping!:)
speak to me
back again....
Poet ~ hi, I don't really know what to say other than let's just all move forward.
Justine ~ Great to see you! :) Looks cozy nestled in the sofa cushins.. haha Hope all is well with you! Thanks for stopping by, again.
Nice poem! Very romantic, except the 'enchanted noodles' part reminds me of my son playing with swimming pool noodles. But that's my problem, lol. Keep up the good work.- Carol
Thanks, Carol! lol ~ I know, those words are quirky, I can see your point.. hehehe.. They are the best choice for me, tho. I appreciate your reading! :)
Very nice! I was almost there. JM
Great to here, James! Thank you. :)
you have alot of comments nice!!!
Thank you, princess-sisi! :D
Lurve It!
Thank you, Sa Toya! :D
Thank you invicus
You made us feel, you made us see, you made us hear and taste. That's what a great poem is.
Thank you, Petra! that is so nice to hear! :D
Very nice.
Thank you, Chris! ;D
oof! i need air after reading that, lol :) good piece dude.
Thank, Marco! Glad you enjoyed ...dude. :D
I like the way you move the earth under my feet
Thanks, for the lovely comment! It's been a while since I've felt the earth under my feet! ;p
I never will think of noodles the same way again! Intermingled and intertwined--I think that those words means worlds--romantic work from you--always a great read.
AIDY! =D Sooo great to see you! You have been VERY missed!! Congrats on best poet! I so hope it lights a match so that we may again be showered with your lovely poetry!
Thank you for your comments...somehow I don't think I'll look at noodles the same either..I totally felt like a wet noodle writing this! and now just thinking about it... omg..:)
Jess Killmenow 2 years ago
Ah, I have asked this question. Sweet poem, Invictus, my friend.